I was awakened by noises out in the parking lot of my apartment when someone started trying to get into my front door. I sat up quickly and listened. The door rattled some more. I ran to my closet and I crouched in my closet as quiet as a church mouse. My heart was beating so fast. I had to slow down my breathing so It wouldn't be so loud.
Men were yelling at each other outside. All I could think of was the apartment down the street was robbed and the woman that lived there had been raped and beaten. She is still in the hospital recovering. Oh my God, what if that happens to me? I started shaking. The time passed so slowly.
All of a sudden, my alarm went off and I knew that it was 6:00 am. The noises had stopped and I felt safe to come out of my closet. The sun was rising and I was safe. Suddenly it occurred to me, how badly I had to pee!
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I am glad everything was OKAY! LOL at the ending, I am sure she did need to pee!
I tried to make the story intense and then have something comical at the end. Haha! Don’t know if I managed it but it was fun trying!
I would say you did. 🙂
Thanks JR! I appreciate that!
What a horrifying situation it must had been. I’m glad the alarm disrupted everything though. Love the ending. 😀
Thank you Yinglan! Had it been me in the closet I probably would have peed my pants! Haha!
Haha! 😀
hope the lady in the hospital recovers physically and mentally. the scars of violence run deep. a funny twist to a tense story.
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Thank you so much!!
Haha! Loved the humorous twist! Well done PJ. Always a pleasure to read your stories:)
Thank you Jade! I appreciate that! I feel my stories are always lacking.
Haha, it’s strange how are minds get carried away during the night fearing the worst. Good story PJ.
Haha! That’s exactly right! Our imaginations get carried away. Thank you so much Iain!
So convincingly written I’m wondering if at least some of this story is true. Well done.
Thank you very much JS! I’m sure I have been in that same position before. LOL!
You’re welcome.
You painted a strong picture, fear is a terrible thing which to many people have to face.
Yes, that is true. Fear is a strong emotion. Thank you so much Mike!
I love when you add a zinger like that at the end! Made me smile!!! 🙂
Haha! Thanks Jodi! I was just in the kind of mood. Put a touch of humor in a “tense” story.
It worked!!
Thank you! I’m so glad to hear that!
Loved it Joy, the curse of that morning awakening…..
Thank you so much Michael! I appreciate you reading!
Well thank goodness you could hold it!!!!
Actually, if it had been me, I would have wet my pants just from being so scared! Hahaha!
Truthfully…..I would likely have too!
Seems like those dreams we have right as we’re waking up are most memorable! Great twist, PJ!
Thank you so much Terri!
Maybe some sort of “wardrobe toilet” would be in order in case this happens again 🙂
Hahaha! Good idea!
Most fictional stories about someone waking up in the morning neglect this reality of life.
LOL! That is so true!
Take home message – set alarm. Great pragmatic write.
Thank you YS!!
Quite a few tense moments there PJ! Love the suspense.
Thank you Sailaja!!
You are welcome PJ! 😙
Hi PJ, I love how you ended upper story, a nice little twist there. Hope you are well?
Hi Tania! Nice to hear from you! I am well and I hope you are too. How have you been?
Exciting and terrifying story. I’m glad she wasn’t brutalized like her neighbor. I can sense how scared she is and it’s like time just passed and her alarm goes off be suddenly she knows they’re gone and she’s okay. The end made me laugh. In fight or flight mode, you would forget about that. Great write !