FFfAW-Running as Fast as I Can

The other night I was walking home from my friend's house when I saw a white van driving down the street very slowly. Immediately I thought of the news of a white van being seen at which time a young girl was kidnapped. My heart skipped a beat and I began running down the street to my home.

The van sped up as I was running and my heart was beating out of my chest. The fear that I felt was palpable and I just knew I was about to be kidnapped too.

Suddenly, the van pulled up beside me and I tried to run even faster, when a voice from the van said,

“Young lady, which way is it to Main Street?”

I didn't turn and look, instead I pointed my finger in the other direction, and picked up my speed.

The van turned around and drove off in that direction and I was finally home safe and sound.

(160 words)

Thank you Maria for our photo prompt this week!


This is my 160 word story for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which we create our stories. It is fun and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click HERE.

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87 thoughts on “FFfAW-Running as Fast as I Can

  1. Fear is often an imagined state of mind rather than a real threat. Glad she was okay though. My first thought was something like this for the prompt too, but I ended up going a different way. Nice work PJ.

  2. Very tense story — you had me really worried, along with the narrator, about what would happen next! Luckily the person only wanted directions, but it could have been very different.

  3. Nice work Joy. You built up some good suspense here, and I’m glad things made out okay. If there’s anything to criticize, its that the story felt a little rushed and fast paced for only a 160 words. πŸ™‚ Besides that, I really liked the use of the word “palpable”.

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