FFfAW – The Room

Amanda carefully walked up the steps of the old house and entered into a mysterious room. The room appeared to be connected to many other rooms and before long, she found herself virtually lost. She walked in circles trying to find her way back to the steps where she came from but only became more lost and more confused.

Finally, Amanda came to a complete stop and decided to try something different. She closed her eyes and chanted:

“Please help me get out of this room.” She began spinning in circles.

When she opened her eyes, she found herself at the top of the stairs that brought her to this puzzling room. She took a deep breath, ran down the stairs and never looked back.

(125)

Thank you Joy Pixley for our photo prompt this week!

This is my 125 word submission for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which to create our stories. It is fun and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click HERE.

Click on the blue froggy button to read the other submissions for this challenge:

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91 thoughts on “FFfAW – The Room

  1. Wonderful write! I had often considered writing flash fiction like this, but haven’t found the right inspiration yet I guess. I’m also a bit pessimistic that I can craft a story using a short amount of words, but you have done this beautifully. Hats off and a big thumbs up to you! πŸ™‚

    • You’d be surprised how easy it is to write a flash fiction story. Sorry you haven’t seen a prompt yet that has given you inspiration to write but I sure hope the FFfAW challenge will soon offer a prompt that gives you the inspiration and you will join our merry band of flash fiction writers! Thank you for your kind comment!

  2. Great name choice for a main character πŸ˜‰ unfortunately, it’s true Amanda would get very lost, even if this wasn’t a house with many passages and rooms. Thank goodness for the chant. I wonder what mystery lies ahead? Lovely write!

      • HaHe yep. It was a popular name when I was a baby. I never had any Other Amanda’s in my classes until university. I used to hate being called Amanda in my French 150.

        They stuck me in French immersion French (means you can actually speak it) and I didnt understand why French class was so hard until a month before the year was over and I found out I was in the immersion class, not the regular 150 French class.

        There were three Amanda’s in this class. Because there were three of us, she always called us forward to do stuff on the white board. I scrapped by with a C+. We had many multiples of names in this class, it was weird. Ashley’s and Crystals etc…

  3. I would be not looking back as well! I have had dreams where i can’t get out of places and have been so glad when I awake from them! πŸ™‚ Good story!
    Oh I know today is Tuesday, but I posted another Dewey story, couldn’t wait for Saturday this time. LOL!

  4. Big, old houses can definitely be confusing and I like the way you’ve created this situation for your character. I also like the magical feel to the tale, making all these rooms seem even more puzzling. Her spinning round and round to get herself out of the maze of rooms adds to the fantasy feel. I’m glad she found her way out! Nice little story, PJ.

  5. Thanks for visiting my blog. Your story is like a dreamscape. I am left wondering who, if anyone, answered your heroine’s request: her own self? God? No-one (it was coincidental that she found her way out after her ‘cry for help’)?

  6. Hey, enjoyed this. Good ruthm and kept me reading on.

    My only critique would be the choice in word ‘virtually lost’- you’re lost or you’re not.

    I’ve also noticed your sentence length and flow has tightened in later entries after this one. Goes to show that practice hones skill and that these challenges are developing you as a writer!

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