FFfAW-The Blue Door

The blue door is inviting. I cautiously knock feeling some apprehension. What will she say when she sees me? Will she recognize me? It's been such a long time. My anxiety begins to build as I wait for her to answer. What if she rejects me?

I hear a small dog barking in the background. I hear someone moving around inside. I knock again, lightly. The television is on, I hear it in the background. Shuffling sounds come nearer to the door. The door creaks open.

I see the aged version of the woman I remember.

“Mamma, is that you?”


(100)

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This is my submission for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which we create our stories. Everyone is invited to participate in this challenge. For more information, click HERE.

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94 thoughts on “FFfAW-The Blue Door

  1. It’s a simple tale of coming back home but you have written it in such a way that as a reader I wasn’t expecting such an end. Yes, I’m not exaggerating but you have successfully created a suspense here.
    Thank you for writing such a beautiful story πŸ™‚

  2. Lovely Joy, that’s a heart stopping moment to have the door open on a person you haven’t seen for a long time and wondering what they now look like. Enjoyed this tale very much.

  3. Great story! I love the build up and anticipation. Now I want to know more: why has so much time past? Why does she fear rejection? The possibilities are endless, and my imagination is running wild!

  4. I thought you did a great job creating anticipation. Now it makes me wonder how this person is received by their mother? Did they part on bad terms or good? Will Momma even recognize them?

  5. Great lead up to his once again seeing his mother. I do hope it was a joyful one for both of them. The feeling of his anxiety came through your writing. Great job, Joy!

  6. What a beautiful picture and the blue color of that door is gorgeous!! What a sweet story PJ! So much in so little…you really are so great at being able to tell so much in a story with so few words as is the point.

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