FFfAW – Hidden

My path, hidden by a veil of tenebrous clouds, allows only slivers of golden rays to pass that barely lights my way. The birds flying over, coo, echoing mourning cries. Fighting the chill in the air, I wrap my arms around myself, attempting to warm my shivering body.

Suddenly, I see him, the one I have been running from for so long; the one who raped me, leaving me shamed, terrified and vulnerable. I want to run up to him and claw his eyes out.

Instead, I continue walking, keeping my head down, hidden from his cruel and lecherous eyes.



Thank you TJ for our beautiful photo prompt this week!

This is my 100 word submission for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which we use to create our stories. Flash Fiction is fun and addicting and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click HERE.

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124 thoughts on “FFfAW – Hidden

  1. You set the scene well in the first paragraph for the almost encounter that follows. Tenebrous is a great word! And the narrator’s anger and fear are palpable – difficult story, PJ, but you pulled it off expertly.

  2. Oh God! Reading this made me emotional Pj. The statistics are alarming. I remember reading the newspaper when I was growing up and rape and molestation was a daily occurrence. It hurts.

  3. Love your story, the atmosphere is set very well. Wish she could’ve seen a friend instead, someone who would’ve triggered happier memories.
    On another note, glad you’re talking about your experience. One way to move forward is to talk about it and explore the feelings related, and you can do that with writing. No matter how long ago it was, if it’s still with you in any way, there’s still room for healing. I would know. πŸ™‚

    • Thank you Alixa! I believe you are right! There is a lot of healing in writing. It’s a terrible experience but I’m ready to put it all behind me and write about happier things. πŸ™‚ For some reason, this photo prompt has been bringing out a lot of sad or horror stories. Have you noticed that?

      • I have and I started writing a happy story that is taking an unexpected turn. I’ll post shortly.
        I think it’s the path. Because it’s not clear and safe always. Even if there’s happy at the end, it’s the challenges on the road that makes one who they are once they reach their goal πŸ™‚

  4. Wow, this story makes you feel so bad for the woman. That she is even near the man who raped her is horrible 😦 Hopefully, there are better days ahead for the protagonist and some other-worldly judgement/punishment for the rapist in the very least.

  5. I’m sorry to hear that. In college, I was engaged to a girl who got raped in Spain while attending college there. It was a completely devastating experience. While I couldn’t feel her pain as she did, I remember the way she would talk about it in pieces. Never could or would she discuss more than bits and pieces. She was a mess for years. It stole her life.

  6. Evokes so much emotion with 100 words. I am in awe reading your short stories every week, I really do enjoy them and hope that one day you publish a book of short stories. Sorry to hear about your experience, which resulted in this story. What goes around comes around and so he got what he deserved.

  7. I’m sorry to hear about your experience, PJ ((hugs)) ((hugs)) It’s definitely karma that he ended up that way. God will surely punish those who hurt others. But sometimes, it makes me wonder why he let such thing happened in the first place. My friend was raped by her step-dad. Luckily, he was caught. But she had definitely suffered in those years.

  8. Powerful story. I hope sharing some of your experience through story is cathartic. I appreciate your courage in posting this. And thank you for teaching me the meaning of the word “Tenebrous”. πŸ™‚

  9. Beautiful sad story written, PJ. This may not even be a fiction after all. Somewhere around the world, a girl could meet an unforgivable man like that and she would either choose to claw his eyes out or bow her head in defeat. 😦

  10. Hats off PJ… for such a powerful take on the prompt. I am sorry for that one terrible incident. You are courageous to talk about it. May God give all the sufferers similar courage and strength to come out of dark days and see the light. May all perpitrators suffer and rot.
    Tragic incidents are our tests… Seems like you got a distinction PJ in your test. God bless you!

    • Thank you Shivangi! I appreciate your kind words and understanding. It was a long time ago but things like that creep up in our minds and demand to be heard. I hope others will talk about their experiences, as well. I would not talk about it for a very long time because of the shame.

  11. You captured the pain and anguish so very well Joy. I am so sorry for what you had to endure. I have a good friend who has written her account of her childhood sexual abuse and rape and is now embarking on the later stages of her life….

  12. When “victims” tell their stories, they are empowering themselves and others. Past trauma can come back into the mind/emotion — unbidden; conjured up by a news story, a blog post, a memory.
    You have put a lot of emotion and pain into 100 words. I know that what goes around comes around, and that there can be justice, karma, or pay back. I’ve experienced it.
    Thank you for sharing a piece of yourself in the story. I think that the sadness coming out in the stories this week is the position of the lone figure on this side of the walk. It creates an air of loneliness, grief, and loss.

    • Thank you and I agree with you about pain and past traumas. Little things can bring back those memories and writing it out is empowering and healing. Thank you for your kind words. Now that you mention the lone figure in the photo, it makes sense that this is what is bringing out the stories we are getting from the prompt this week. Thank you for your wonderful comment.

  13. Aw PJ I’m sorry that this is the emotions this picture brought forth in you and I’m even more sorry that you experienced that. I wish I could take the hurt and memory away. πŸ˜”. Good morning ((HUGS!)) xoxo

  14. This is so powerful and heartbreaking. You’ve literally ripped my heart out in 100 words. The whole notion of rape infuriates me; for someone to think they have the right to someone else’s body like that. You did an amazing job telling the story here, PJ.

  15. I love the word ‘tenebrous’! This is a powerfully written story, PJ. Rape is something that no woman should have to experience. I hope writing about it is healing for you.

  16. Wow, that piece made my head spin–in a good way! There’s such a beautiful description at first and then it turns into something dark. Too bad she didn’t give the guy a good shove into the water!

  17. Seems he never was worth spit and is worth even less next she sees him. Deep inside, though probably not where you wanted to go, I wish she’d walk by him holding her head high and shooting him the bird.

  18. I had a comment for this beautifully written evocative piece, but after reading through the comments at am at a loss. I am so sorry PJ. And greatly admire you for sharing your story (greater than I already did)

    • Thank you so much. I appreciate your kind words. I’m not sure if you are saying it also happened to you, but if that is the case, please accept my sincere apologies that you had to go through that too.

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