I's been wanting me a bicycle fer a long long time but Mama could'nt affords ta buys me one and Pap's gone now. He lefts 'bout five years ago and we ain't seen his drunken hide since.
I gots me a job deliverin' papers. But I hasta walk and dat mades my job hard. So, I's saves my money and boughts me a bicycle.
Lordy! Now my paper route are so easy.
I gives my mama money so things be easier fer her and she's so happy an' proud a me. And dat makes me feels right damn swell.
(100)
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Thank you!
Great story, love the way you changed your writing style to fit the narrator 🙂
Thank you Alixa! I tried to write in his voice.
A touch of Yorkshire dialect, brave! Loved it, well done ☺
I’m not sure what Yorkshire dialect is but it is “hillbilly” dialect here.
LOL, region in North England… The full Monty was full of it!
LOL!
Ah, I too had thought it to be a dialect from somewhere in Britain. Alas, I’m not too familiar with the names of all the different regions.
Once I read your comment, I read it again and can now see it as ‘hillbilly’. 🙂
Whichever it is, I thought it was a great way to show the speaker’s voice and tone. Well done.
Thank you so much Laura! I really appreciate that!
a WONDERFUL STORY
Thank you so much Donna! 🙂 I appreciate that!
Lovely story of a boy finding the good in a rather sad situation.
Loved it
Thank you! He is happy to help his mother. 🙂
Oh. I love when you do voices PJ you are so good at them. It is excellent this young guy was able to save for a bike and can help is Mom out with money now. Great job!
Thank you so much Mandi! This was a fun story to write.
Great use of dialect! I just loved the line, “we ain’t seen his drunken hide since”! Haha! 😀
LOL! I have a lot of fun when I write in hillbilly dialect. Maybe I should say, try to write in hillbilly dialect. Haha!
Hey, you do it with ease, like you’re a natural born speaker, haha!
LOL! I must be 1/2 hillbilly! Hahaha
Oh, I love this, PJ! Great use of dialect and the story is soooo lovely. I bet Mama is proud of her youngster 🙂
Thank you so much Sonyca! Yes, she is proud of her “boy.” He’s a good boy!
Adding my voice to those who like the “voice” you created here! Such a great sense of the kid himself (or herself, could be), and also of his sad situation — which makes it even more pleasant that he’s improving it with his job and now his new bike. Hooray!
Thank you so much Joy! I enjoy writing stories using this type of dialect. He is certainly improving his situation – and his mothers!
I love the dialect!
Thank you so much J.A.! It’s fun to write stories using this dialect. Fun and challenging. LOL!
Great voice you have used Joy, made me want for good things for the character…..well done..
Thank you Michael! Yes, I too grew fond of the young boy as I wrote about him. 🙂
nice story and I liked the character! nice bike!
Thank you Lynn! I grew fond of the young boy too as I was writing about him. 🙂
yes so nice! 🙂
Ingenuity wins out! Great story, and now I want to hear it spoken.
I love hearing this dialect spoken. It is considered, “Hillbilly” here in the states. (I’m not sure which country you are from). Thanks for reading and for the comment!
With great determination, he’ll surely succeed. Love the dialect too! 🙂
He seems to be a very determined young man! Thanks for reading and commenting! 🙂
You are welcome 😉
Great story, Joy! Different, and shows that one does not have to be rich to be a successful and a well respected person. Success comes in many forms. Hard work and determination goes a long way. 🙂
Thank you Jessie! I agree and this young man may be a doctor, Scientist, or President some day!
Great story, Joy, the voice you created brought it to life. A fun read!
Thank you so much Oliana! 🙂
Excellent my friend! I could picture the child in my head telling this story 🙂
Thank you JR! I’m so glad you could imagine him!
Loved it. The accent used in this post makes it special.
Thank you so much! 🙂
It was such a sweet and uplifting story. Loved the dialect too. 🙂
Thank you Susan!
I know, just like Mandi said, I Love it when you do voices. Wonderful story Pj. 😄
Thank you so much Ameena! I like doing hillbilly dialect. It’s fun! 🙂
I love the dialect you’ve used her, PJ. It’s good to read out loud, and makes the boy seem more real. He sounds like a kind and caring lad, concerned not only for himself, but his mother. You’ve shown really well how hard it is for families to survive when one parents deserts them – and the boy so wants his mama to be proud of him. What a resourceful lad, saving up his money like that to buy a bike to help him on his paper round. He’s a son to be proud of. 🙂
Thank you so much Millie! He is indeed a very endearing young man. 🙂
Well, he got to me, PJ. I think I’d really like him if I met him. 🙂
Great work PJ~ Another tycoon in the making here certainly.:)
Yes, you’re right. He may end up to be a wealthy business man! Thank you for reading John!
Great use of dialect to create the character’s voice, PJ. A lovely, heartwarming story. 🙂
Thank you Louise! I appreciate your lovely comment!
Really enjoyable tale well told (as usual). Great voice.
Thank you Graham! I appreciate you reading and your wonderful comment!
Wow! What a great piece of dialect and prose, PJ!
With so little, he’s giving back so much more.
Ellespeth
Thank you Ellespeth! I enjoy writing in Hillbilly dialect.
Beautiful! I could feel his pleasure through the words. His job will be easier now 🙂
His job is much easier now! Thank you for reading!
You are welcome 🙂
Merry Christmas! (if you celebrate it).