FFfAW – The New Bicycle

I's been wanting me a bicycle fer a long long time but Mama could'nt affords ta buys me one and Pap's gone now. He lefts 'bout five years ago and we ain't seen his drunken hide since.

I gots me a job deliverin' papers. But I hasta walk and dat mades my job hard. So, I's saves my money and boughts me a bicycle.

Lordy! Now my paper route are so easy.

I gives my mama money so things be easier fer her and she's so happy an' proud a me. And dat makes me feels right damn swell.

(100)

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This is my 100 word submission for the challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 75-175 words with which to build our stories with. It is fun and addicting and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click HERE.

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63 thoughts on “FFfAW – The New Bicycle

  1. Adding my voice to those who like the “voice” you created here! Such a great sense of the kid himself (or herself, could be), and also of his sad situation — which makes it even more pleasant that he’s improving it with his job and now his new bike. Hooray!

  2. Great story, Joy! Different, and shows that one does not have to be rich to be a successful and a well respected person. Success comes in many forms. Hard work and determination goes a long way. πŸ™‚

  3. I love the dialect you’ve used her, PJ. It’s good to read out loud, and makes the boy seem more real. He sounds like a kind and caring lad, concerned not only for himself, but his mother. You’ve shown really well how hard it is for families to survive when one parents deserts them – and the boy so wants his mama to be proud of him. What a resourceful lad, saving up his money like that to buy a bike to help him on his paper round. He’s a son to be proud of. πŸ™‚

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