Listening to the rain tapping the roof, Carol remembered how peaceful that sound once made her feel. She wanted to feel that peace again.
Jason took that peace away from her. It's his fault she fell in love with him and why all she felt was raging jealousy.
Jason wouldn't allow himself to be tied to just one woman.
Not being able to take it anymore, she lured Jason to the basement, shot him and shoved his body into the waiting grave. The large steamer trunk fit over the top just fine.
Finally, peace has found her once again.
(100)
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Powerful story… Wonder how long her peace and secret would remain safe😀
LOL! Probably not for long.
Wow, great story. I hate to say I cannot blame her. Not condoning it but not blaming…
Guess we wouldn’t know what we would do until in that position. Thank you for reading!
Do not disturb her peace. I repeat do not disturb her peace! Yikes I have been shot by the lady for disturbing her peace. Great story.
Thank you so much! 🙂 LOL! (I do not disturb her peace. :D)
Dark, PJ, dark. I doubt her peace will last long…
I don’t think it will either. LOL!
Good story. Seems like Jason had it coming to him. You push someone to the limit too much and sometimes a nice person can do a very bad thing.
Yes, true. We all have our breaking points and don’t know what those are until we actually get there. Thank you for reading and commenting Mandi!
Hi Joy I felt this story had an air of great satisfaction. Well done.
Thank you so much Michael!
That Jason deserved it! He failed her first! Great story! 😀 Maybe an extension of the story would be Jason’s ghost haunted the house…LOL 😛
That would make a great second part. LOL! Thanks so much! Thank you for reading and commenting. 🙂
My pleasure 😉
🙂
It started out so peaceful. 🙂 Not a woman to be played with. Jason should have known better and now he will have lots of time to think about it. Scary lady though.
Yes, she is scary. Mentally ill. She can’t handle jealousy. Yes, my story probably started out too peaceful. LOL! Thank you so much for reading and commenting!
No I like the contrast. It gives more of a twist to the end. 🙂
Oh good! Thank you! 🙂
You’re welcome. 🙂
Wow, you really went dark with this one, Joy! She even blames him for her crazy feelings — which is pretty consistent with the rest of her behavior. Yikes! Hope she gets the help she needs before she falls for someone else (and vice versa).
Yes, she does blame him for her crazy feelings. She definitely needs help! I have a feeling her floor may have a beating heart. LOL! Thank you for reading and commenting.
Beating heart under the floor boards, yes, I can see that fitting here too!
Hahaha! It will vibrate the entire house from the basement.
Glad she found “peace”… Would not want to get in her way? Not sure you can blame another for falling in love? BUT I WOULD NOT TELL HER THAT!
That’s true. Normal people don’t blame the other one for falling in love. I wouldn’t want to tell her that either. LOL! Thanks for reading and commenting!
Enjoyed the read!
Thanks Roger! Thanks for reading!
She really took drastic measures to get her peace back! He was a real so, and so…but she’s even worse. I hope no one else gets in the way of her “peace” . Great story, Joy.
Thank you Jessie! Yes, she is a real “mental case.” LOL! I hope no one messes with her peace too. She might just add them to her floor. hahaha!
I definitely didn’t see that ending coming.
LOL! Yes, she lost her mind and got rid of her problem. Thanks for reading!
And like Poe she will begin to hear his heart thundering through the house. Great story!
Thank you Tessa!
Well I did NOT see that coming!!!! I think that she found peace in that says a whole lot more about this story that we haven’t heard yet! Well done Priceless. This could be a great send off to a deeper story!
Thanks Colleen! Yes, she is definitely mentally ill or close to it! Thank you for reading and commenting!
There is nothing that a bit of murder will not fix…
LOL! In this case, that is true! Thank you for reading and commenting!
She seems normal somehow. The idea of keeping someone is hard to understand
Yes, it is. Well, at least now, she has him all to herself. LOL
She probably is mad at him for making her kill him to get that peace.
Yes, she probably is. LOL
Dear PJ,
Looks like a case of how long can she live with the guilt.
I’d enjoy reading this in a longer form.
I’m curious about whether or not she’d be able to hold it together.
Great intro to a mystery.
Isadora 😎
Thanks Isadora! She found a way to keep him all to herself!
WOW! I didn’t expect that from you. I must have gotten used to your “happily ever after” stories that I tease you about. Very powerful and grim. Mine was the fairy tale ending tonight. LOL:)
It’s fun to do something different every once in a while. I had fun killing him off. Hahaha!
I agree, we couldn’t judge until we are in the same position.
You killed him off and I like this change in your story 🙂
Thank you Madeeha! It’s fun to kill someone off once in awhile. LOL
🙂
Short and strong piece of writing. She won’t will be at peace at all. Her conscience is going to haunt her all the way
I believe you are right. That heart is going to beat through the floor!
A very dark story, PJ! I wonder how long it will be before someone finds his body…? Maybe she’ll find peace in a prison cell! A great story. 🙂
No kidding! Her peace certainly isn’t going to last very long that’s for sure. A prison cell will probably be her end. Thank you for reading and commenting!
Peaceful end indeed.. I think she need to learn mixing concrete for the peace to last.
Yes, I agree! LOL 😀 Thank you so much for reading and commenting.
such a powerful story. she should just have left him and find somebody rich and better looking.
Yes! I think if she was thinking “normally” she would have but she’s “off her rocker.” LOL! Besides, it would not have been as much fun to write. 😀
Holy Smokes PJ!!! I read your story first then scrolled down to the picture and wondered how did you go from such a serene, peaceful looking picture to such a dark, morbid story. I thought, oh my I certainly don’t want to make PJ angry..hee hee…Excellent writing, completely drew me in, loved the dark side for a change!! Take that Jason!!! 😉
Hahaha! I wrote several stories for this picture and this is the one I chose because, well, it is different than what I normally write and it’s fun to be different. LOL! Thank you for reading!!
It is fun to be different!! Continue being different, I love it!! xo
Thank you!! XO
I haven’t read all the comments but I’m sure all the women are cheering Carol on. It’s always the guy’s fault! He made her fall in love with him, he took her peace away, he put the gun in her hand. So who do we guys have to blame? I, for one, blame my mother! 🙂 Oh, yeah, great story. (I really did enjoy it!)
LOL! I don’t think most women think this way, only the ones that are “unwell” in the head. haha! (In fact, just about all of the women that read this story didn’t like the ending). Of course, I know you are just kidding. 😉
That was a story with a punch, PJ. Jealousy definitely got the better of her and led her to do something totally irrational and seemingly out of character. I wonder how long it will take her to regret what she’s done. Great story. 🙂
LOL – You are right Millie. I figure that it won’t be long and that heart will start beating underneath the floor. Haha! (I had a little fun with this one).
Ooh, that beating heart idea sounds a bit creepy. I suddenly feel a ghost story coming on. I can see you enjoyed writing this, Joy! It does you good to do something different now and then. 🙂
Yes it does do a body good to be bad once in awhile. LOL!
Of course, I won’t take Poe’s idea but I do figure she will start feeling guilty. She’s not right in her head.
Yes, I think guilt could gnaw at her conscience, making her even more unstable that she already is.
Yes, I agree with you.
Oh how horrifying. Don’t mess with love lol!
LOL! So true! Especially for this woman. Thank you for reading!
Oh my..she’s not very nice.
LOL! Yes, she is a bit off her rocker.