FFfAW: Park Outing

My children were jovially playing on the playground equipment with the other children at the park, while I rested and watched, under a shade tree.

I accidentally fell asleep and woke up thirty minutes later, feeling quite anxious. I could see my son playing but I could’nt see my little daughter. Instantly, I began to panic,

“Jimmy, where is your little sister?”

“I don’t know mommy she was here just a little while ago.”

I ran over to Jimmy and took his hand, gasping,

“We must look for and find your sister!”

We walked everywhere around the park yelling Lilly’s name. That’s when I see the pond and panic consumes me; my mind furiously races with worry, and terror overcomes me. I feel the bile rising inside my throat.

I hear myself screaming, “Lilly, oh Lilly, dear God, no Lilly!” My racing heart begs for this to not be true.

Suddenly, I hear a small soft voice coming from behind me,

“Mommy, I just went to the big girl potty.”


Thank you Dawn M. Miller for our prompt photo this week.

Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers is a fun challenge that is open to anyone who wants to have fun writing flash fiction stories – stories that are approximately 150 words or less based on a prompt photo. If you would like to join this challenge or want to know more about it, please click on this link: FFfAW



63 thoughts on “FFfAW: Park Outing

  1. I panicked for a moment too. What a nice surprise in the end! I feel relieved that the worst didn’t happen. Good story. I enjoyed it. ๐Ÿ™‚

  2. I was so relieved to read such a wonderful ending!!! Often times, that is not the case and you portrayed the lead up to it beautifully! It was full of emotion all the way to the end. Great job, Joy.

  3. I know that frantic feeling. I’ve been babysitting grand-nieces, and went on a trip to a local zoo. One was left behind (I think it was her idea) and I panicked just like the Mother in your story. So glad it had a happy ending — well done!

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