FFfAW – Wedding Bells

Jest about the whole county of Snake River Valley filled the church pews. Billy Lamar stood with Pastor Mackelroy, sweatin' profusely and as twitchy as a mouse in a room full of cats.

Belinda were dressed in her pretty white dress her mamma made and showing a noticeable baby bump. Pa McDuff was standin' beside her to make damn sure Billy Lamar marries his daughter so she don't give birth ta no bastard child.

The weddin' march began ta play and Belinda and Pa began shufflin' ta the front of the church toward Pastor and Billy Lamar. Belinda was smiling from ear ta ear and Billy was tremblin' in mortal fear.

“Dearly Beloved, we are here today ta unite Belinda McDuff and Billy Lamar in blessed matrimony….ta have and ta hold from this day forward…..for as long as you both shall live….. You may kiss your bride.”

Everyone wished the newly wedded couple good luck. Lord knows, they's sure gonna need it.

(162 words)

Photo credit Β©PricelessJoy

This is my 162 word submission for Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and 100-150 words give or take 25, with which to write our story.

This challenge is open to all who would like to participate. If you are interested, click on this link: FFfAW

If you would like to read the other participant's story, click on the blue froggy button below.

 

 

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75 thoughts on “FFfAW – Wedding Bells

  1. ‘sweatin’ profusely and as twitchy as a mouse in a room full of cats’ – what a line, PJ! That tells us all we need to know about his state of mind. Last line is great, too. Great job πŸ™‚

  2. Nicely written. Wish the newly wed all the good luck to keep their marriage successful. πŸ˜€

    I pity the groom..LOL!

  3. The ‘tas’ and the voice of your narrator is excellent. Thank you for linking my story. I didn’t think I could do it yet when I wrote the story last night around 11 pm GMT so I left that for today. So, thank you so much for doing that for me!

  4. Great story and great use of dialect, PJ. πŸ™‚ It really brings the story to life. It’s not quite a shotgun wedding, but I think Billy would run a mile if he could. That line to describe him is simply perfect: “… sweatin’ profusely and twitchy as a room full of cats.’ I love that line! The couple are definitely going to need a lot of luck. πŸ™‚

  5. I agree with Millie and Sonya, that line “sweatin’ profusely and as twitchy as a mouse in a room full of cats” is great! The use of dialect is very effective in this and engaged me from start to finish.

  6. I love this one, PJ! The narrator’s voice is just perfect for the unfolding scene. I agree with Millie – this is almost a shot gun wedding. Or maybe it is πŸ˜›
    Ellespeth

    • Thank you Ellespeth! I wrote it with the “shotgun wedding” in mind, but I didn’t want to use the gun in the story, just the “hint” of it (as being forced). Thanks for reading and for your lovely comment!

  7. Hahaha, oh boy, Billy Lamar sure is In for it! I personally wish him besta luck πŸ˜‰
    This was such a fun story PJ, I can picture the poor groom sweating at the altar .

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