FFfAW – Freedom Bound

Momma told me to sit still and not talk. Baby Ady is fussy. Ssshhh Ady. There are many of us in this small boat going to freedom. Momma said I could go to school and be anything I want to be and nobody would make me do what I don’t want to do and put me in jail if I didn’t do it. I am happy we were going to this place, freedom.

There are four families on our little boat. We are cramped and the babies are getting restless. A man is getting angry. One momma is crying. My momma said she didn’t even want to think about what would happen to us if somebody caught us. I don’t wanna think about it either.

I see a large light. Dogs are barking. People are shouting. My momma is crying.

It’s our grandpapa! We are safe! [145 words]

copyright Β©2015 Priceless Joy

Thank you to Ady with, “The Bourne Infinitude”, for our prompt photo this week.

This is my submission for the weekly challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt and approximately 150 words with which, to write a story. To read the stories submitted for this challenge or to submit your own story, click on the blue froggy button. If you would like to participate, click on the link below:

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58 thoughts on “FFfAW – Freedom Bound

  1. Phew, I was prepared for the worst – glad it’s gramps… “I am happy we were going to this place, freedom.” – love this line! Nicely done, PJ πŸ™‚

  2. Awww, when I saw the flashlights and dogs barking it felt “the volcano was about to erupt” and then i saw “grandpa”. Wheew, i’m glad they got to freedom! πŸ˜„

  3. Perfect story for this photo prompt. It sure feels good to see a happy ending. There are so many tragedies associated with people trying to gain their freedom. Just another reminder of how fortunate we are to live in America. Thanks Joy.

  4. I was so scared while reading and dreading if they will get caught and the dreams of freedom will be shattered …. I can’t tell you how much relief when I read ‘It’s grandpa . We are safe ‘ I could never imagine such a story out of this prompt…You breathe life into the stories PJ πŸ˜€

    P.S Thank you for ‘baby Ady’ character πŸ˜€ ❀ Hugs πŸ˜€

  5. My story is very similar to your story Joy ~ This is a purely coincidental similarity ~ I love the way you introduced Grandpa at the end ~ Very well written πŸ™‚

  6. Oh my gawd! When I think of what a crying baby could mean to families trying to escape to freedom – frightening possibilities just as you’ve written. I really liked this, PJ…and we both had a grandfather in our story:)

  7. Being told from a child’s view made the crossing seem even scarier! I had my fingers crossed reading the story. I was glad it was grandpa, not the police!
    I wrote a story about trying to reach freedom too. I finally posted it tonight. The prompt is great! The responses are excellent.

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