MFtS The Orchids

“Are you laughing at me?”

“No Catherine, I am not laughing at you.” I told her for the third time in a row. Why can’t she understand?

“You have been ill. Get well, so I CAN laugh at you again.”

“I love the flowers Sissy. Thank you so much for bringing them.” Catherine held them up to her nose and smelled their fragrance. “You know that orchids are my favorite.” She sighed, “the ones that smell good anyway.”

I looked down at my nails and started picking at them, “Things are going to be better Catie. When you get out of this hospital, things will be better.” I said, almost convincingly.

“I’m sorry Sissy. It was a stupid thing for me to do. I was… I was stupid.”

I looked at the mark on her neck and my stomach plunged. All I could think about was how grateful I was that the rope had broke. (150 words)

Photo Credit: Barbara Beacham

Thank you to Barbara Beacham for hosting this challenge, Monday’s Finish the Story. She provides us with a photo prompt, the first sentence to our story and gives us about 150 words and challenges us to write a story. Everyone is welcome to participate. If you are interested, click on this link:

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76 thoughts on “MFtS The Orchids

  1. OH PJ that is terribly sad about your niece, I was thinking that there had to be a personal reason when writing this story! HUGS and love to you! I had a dear friend whose husband committed suicide, it is such a tragedy.

  2. Very powerfully written.
    That is very sad about your niece and I am sorry for your loss. I agree with what you wrote above, that it is a permanent solution to a problem which can in time get better.

  3. Catie was very lucky and I hope she realizes that she has family that care deeply about her but it saddens me to know that this story relates to your niece. I really wish it would’ve gone the same way with her. Great story telling as always PJ! πŸ™‚

    • Thank you so much Lrod. I wish it had gone differently for my niece too. But at least I was able to save Catie. πŸ™‚ (which in some ways helped me save Allison in my heart).

  4. I am sorry for your loss Joy! I think you did a fantastic job on writing this story! Hugs to you my dear and thank you for sharing your loss. Be well! ^..^

      • Sometimes I feel I am inexperienced to say the right words and I might mean something and it may come out something especially if it’s on something like this. …. And then my mind gets jumbled πŸ™‚

        • I understand. I feel that way sometimes too. Usually, I will try and say what it is I want to say and hope it doesn’t come out wrong. Most of the time I am pretty sure it doesn’t. You are welcome to say anything you wish to me Ady.

          • I thought I actually liked the story and the surprising end was totally unexpected and yet it was a moment of dread and sudden relief at the same moment but then I read the comments, and I felt so sad about the relief that didn’t came in reality, it was a scary feeling even to feel for brief moments never to have actually suffered and you have seen such an event, a terrible thing for life to be harsh and luck a myth ….. Why are people meant to die like this ? I mean not in a way nature intended but forcing the way, if only somehow it weren’t so…..
            I am sorry if I said anything odd….

          • You didn’t say anything odd at all Ady. I understand exactly what you are trying to say. Suicide is so unnatural. I think it is so sad that people feel so hopeless that they feel there is no other choice. If they only understood that Suicide is a permanent solution to a temporary problem. All problems are temporary. There is always hope. I wish I had had the opportunity to talk to my niece before she made that fatal decision. Thank you for telling me how you feel.

          • I know sometimes I feel there’s no hope and all but I know something if I cease to exist, I might not know for sure and again the very idea chills my mind because I feel, somewhere there might be at least one person, for whom I will be irreplaceable !

          • Absolutely! There are more people than you know that you are irreplaceable to. There are a lot more people than you realize that you matter to. You do matter Ady and you have a wonderful purpose of being on this earth. We just need to surrender ourselves to that God like being whom we believe is much larger than ourselves. I don’t mean become religious. I mean allowing our larger than life being show us that path. Even if that path is helping other women find their paths away from depression and suicidal thoughts. Someone somewhere needs you. And we are all in this together.

  5. I can imagine the emotions in that room at that point. Well done.
    Sorry about your niece. It’s tough on the people left behind!

  6. Your story conveyed the weight on the heart of those left behind when someone commits suicide. I am so sorry about your niece! I lost 2 friends to suicide, and another, like Catie, who survived. In that case, I sat in the hospital for hours waiting to see if she would make it.
    I’m sorry, too, that you didn’t get a chance to speak with your niece. I hope writing this story has taken some of the weight off your heart.

    • Thank you Phylor. Thank you for your kind words. I am sorry about your 2 friends. Suicide is devastating to family and friends. Writing the story actually did help me in a small way. I could say a lot of “I wishes..” but that won’t change what happened. She was a beautiful young woman that came to a place in her life where she felt hopeless.

      • I participate in National/International Suicide Prevention Day. If you use facebook, there is usually an badge to add. I should write a new story — I tend to reblog a story about suicide a while ago,
        I can let you know when it is this year, if you’re interested.

  7. PJ, you have the gift of telling a story in few words. I read this (I just read a couple of others) and was stunned at the ending. Then I read your comment about how this was based on your own family tragedy. I am very sorry to hear about this. But your experience and emotions leaked through to create a compelling short which caused the tears to start. Nicely done as usual!!

  8. This is such a poignant story…hits me right in the gut! so obviously you did a great job…I work on a youth crisis line which I love but feel so powerless when I hear in the news of a youth you succeeded…it breaks my heart and I always wonder if it was a youth you once called us …what I could have done differently.

  9. A very sad tale that you have related so well with such an empathic power Joy ~ I was so sorry to read about your neice in your comment flow above ~ Very well writen ~ πŸ™‚

  10. Very sad to hear this was inspired from real life PJ- unfortunately many of us have had to live with friends or family feeling so lost that they end up taking their lives. I think your story was very appropriately told with this prompt as flowers are symbolic of grief as well as joy..

  11. This is such a poignant story, so much emotion underlying their conversation. I’m so sorry for your loss. Your courage in writing a message of hope regarding such a tragedy is inspiring.

    Thank you for such a well-written and thought provoking piece.

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