White Water Rapids – MFtS 3-23-2015

When the team heard the dam explode, they knew they had limited time to make it to safety. In an instant, their “white water rapids vacation tour” had become a matter of life and death.

The white water river rapids had become gargantuan in size and their very lives were in dire peril.

The lead, Edward, screamed, “HANG ON TIGHT,” his voice faltering from fear, “AND DO NOT LET GO!”

Everyone was white from terror and one lady began to retch. Everyone was screaming at the top of their lungs and swallowing water from the drenching. Edward was screaming over their screams, trying to keep everyone calm, including himself.

The raft rode over huge waves up and down and water threatened to sink the raft.

After ten minutes of white knuckling, the raft finally came to calm waters. Their relief was palpable. Now, they just needed to stay calm and wait for rescue.

Finally, above them, they could see the helicopters coming. Everyone started crying and clapping.

Edward included.

(149 words)

Join Barbara Beachem and her band of Monday Fictioneers as we accept her challenge of writing a flash story of 150 words or less using the photo prompt and the first sentence, which she gives us. It’s fun and addicting! If you would like more information click this link: Monday’s Finish the Story

Thank you Barbara, for our prompts today.



51 thoughts on “White Water Rapids – MFtS 3-23-2015

  1. So, Joy, was this what you expected? πŸ™‚ I loved your story, and it was full of tension which is a sign of good writing! Thanks again for sticking with the MFtS challenge! See you next week… Be well…. ^..^

  2. I could feel and experience the danger of the water and the force of it. Wew, I’m glad they made it to calmer water. Lovely piece of writing

  3. A terrifying and life-threatening descent through the rapids, PJ, relieved by that happy ending. I’m so glad it didn’t end in disaster. One small thing … where you’ve used the word palatable, I think you need palpable instead. Palatable is often used to mean nice food, or a pleasant situation at best. Palpable means evident or clear to others. Look them up and see what you think. πŸ™‚

  4. A wonderful safe ending to an action packed vacation tour ~ This will be an unrepeatable experience for most of the trippers ~ Just a great after-dinner tale ~ Well done Edward for keeping a cool head ~Nice work PJ

  5. I like what you did. There is only so many directions to go with an exciting photo like this.
    And it is nice too to have that relief of rescue!
    Another day to perhaps see cascading stars πŸ™‚

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