Shattered: Mondays Finish the Story 03-16-2015

“A body suddenly crashed through a plate glass window at Brigadier’s house.”

The crashing sound and the shattering glass was heard throughout the mansion, sending Brigadier Dunhurst running into the sitting room. Higgins was there sweeping it up.

“What the hell was that Higgins?”

“A bird sir,” Higgins answered, sweeping the broken glass into the dustpan.

“Oh my Gawd, can’t they see it’s glass and not the sky?!”

“Actually, no, sir. The sky reflects off the window, making it appear to be all one sky.” Higgins answered, sweeping even faster.

“Call the Insurance Company and tell them we need to replace another window.”

“Yes sir. I will do that. Ummm… Sir…”

“Yes, Higgins. What is it?!

“Do you think we could order a different kind of pane?”

“What on earth do you mean?”

“One that doesn’t give off a reflection?”

“Oh, who the hell cares, Higgins?!”

“The birds, sir.”

(150 words)

Photo Credit: Barbara Beachem

Barbara Beachem is the kind host of Mondays Finish the Story Challenge. She gives us a photo prompt, along with the first sentence of our story, and challenges us to write a story of 150 words or less.

The above story is my submission for this week. If you would like to participate in this fun challenge, please click on this link:

Mondays Photo Fiction


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65 thoughts on “Shattered: Mondays Finish the Story 03-16-2015

  1. That last line just gets me. I don’t know what it is. Maybe it’s the way I picture him saying it in my head….kinda smart-ass but serious at the same time. I just had to chuckle.

  2. Higgins is the perfect servent and the voice for him was perfect. Very understated, but caring. He sounds like he’s worth his weight in gold. Birds do that, I’ve seen it. Good story, Joy. πŸ™‚ — Suzanne

  3. Excellent story Joy! Wouldn’t it be great for all of us to be able to find a non-reflective glass that did not fool the birds? We have them crashing into our windows here in the Sierra Foothills every summer. Loved this tale that you so elegantly wove, and I thank you for participating in the MFtS challenge yet again! See you next week? I hope so! Be well my friend! ^..^

    • Haha! That’s exactly where I got his “personality” from as I have never met a butler in my life. It’s a good thing he’s short, sweet and dry because I didn’t have enough words to make him different.

  4. This story just made me laugh. The birds played a very important part in this one lol and the ending was just the best part. I can imagine him with a straight face saying the last line πŸ˜€
    On a side note: sometimes I don’t see posts on the reader from people I follow. I haven’t seen yours since last week so I have to go to your blog to view them. Have you had that problem?

    • No, I don’t know what’s going on. All of a sudden my comments started going to spam and maybe they have kicked me off the reader too. That makes me angry but I don’t know what to do about it. (I wrote an angry post about WordPress). Will you please let me know if it stays that way???

  5. Great dialogue, PJ. I really like the way your story unfolds, and Higgins is an excellent butler. The last line was brilliant. (Higgins was my ‘maiden’ name – but my dad wasn’t a butler!) Birds flying into glass was a clever idea and a nice change from all the flying human bodies. Well done. πŸ™‚

        • Very true! I thought Higgins was an English name. I’m not sure where my grandmother Higgins’ family came from but where ever it is, they settled in North Carolina, then later down the line, moved west.

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          • I’ve read that Higgins was an old Irish name, some branches of the clan being O’Higgins. I picked up a little souvenir plaque with all this on when we were in Ireland a few years ago. And my grandfather was definitely Irish!

          • That’s awesome to know. I never knew where our Higgins family came from. For some reason I am thinking Scotland, but I could be wrong, it could be Ireland instead. (according to the family history I worked on- that is what I can remember).

          • I’ve never seen anything linking the name to Scotland, PJ, and Higgins doesn’t sound Scottish. But if you say you’ve read that, it may well be right. I’ll have a look into it when I’ve time. Thanks for telling me, anyway! πŸ™‚

  6. Great take on the prompt! It’s good to see a non-human body breaking that window. πŸ™‚ Good old Higgins, thinking about the birds. Non-reflective glass is a great idea. We’re always having birds fly into our windows and several have killed themselves doing so – though we’ve never had any hit hard enough to break the pane!

    • It is sad that birds are just flying along happily and then BANG their dead from flying into the panes. Seems like there should be some kind of glass that would help that from occurring.

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