Haiku – Poetry – Lesson 1

Deep startling clean blue water

Inticing me to Swim Long and Deep

Until I'm like a Prune

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77 thoughts on “Haiku – Poetry – Lesson 1

  1. Great Haiku. And I can totally relate to the ending up like a prune! I used to swim until my mom forced me to get out of the water πŸ™‚ I don’t know how you keep up with all these Challenges and Classes. I can barely keep up with one – two posts a day. I can only do that because I schedule my post over the weekend.

  2. I really like the imagery. Your first and second lines are each 1 syllable to long for a haiku though (illustrating my issue with the english language and haiku format.) Standard format is line one: 5 syllables, line 2: 7 syllables, line 3: 5 syllables. This is very difficult to achieve and still have nice imagery. 😦 And your haiku would lose out if you had to change it.

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